Task 5 Version 2: It's been proved that reading for pleasure develops the imagination and betters the language skills than watching TV does.
It's been proved
that reading for pleasure develops the imagination and betters the language
skills than watching TV does. State whether you agree or disagree and give
reasons for your view.
It's been proved that reading for pleasure develops the imagination and betters the language skills than watching TV does.
Nowadays lots of people prefer watching TV rather than reading books. It became a social problem. People do not pay attention to books and they started spending most of their time watching TV. I partially agree with this statement because people are developed their imagination and language skills by reading books. There are a lot of people assert that watching TV is much better than reading books. I can prove this by giving these arguments. At first book is the main source of knowledge. Books teach us how to be more successful and find yourself in this world. Most of the people who read books have better thinking skills and imagination. At second you can choose what do you to read, however you cannot do the same things with TV. When the person want to spend his/her free time by watching TV the person will watch programs that TV have. The person will just change the channels to find appropriate show. Thirdly, TV are full of improper cartoons and films. People who are watch these programs cannot think out of the box. People are becoming the slaves of TV. So, nowadays the majority of the people are declining from reading books. It is very disturbing problem. Again, the reading and writing skill of a person can be developed by reading a book. Only watching television programs are not a good choice to advance these skills. We must remember that watching TV eradicate out health and creative thinking. In conclusion I would like to say that only by reading books people advance their life. The TV does not stop people from thinking, but it makes it so that people forget about each other. Thank you !
* people are developed their imagination - people develop their imagination (failed usage of passive voice, please read about it here https://www.native-english.ru/grammar/passive-voice) * There are a lot of people assert that watching TV - There are a lot of people, WHO assert that watching TV * prove this by giving these arguments - prove this by giving SOME arguments (it is not good to repeat the eord twice "this, these")
Nowadays, statistics indicate that an index of watching TV decreased because of well-spread internet connections. However, reading for pleasure always remains relevant.
I have been watching TV since I was 3 years old. Therefore, I regret now that I have been wasting my time. I might have become better in science if I read a lot of books.
I completely agree with the statement above. There are resemblances and differences between them. One of the resemblances is that they provide information and broaden our purviews. Moreover, since they are types of hobbies, we can watch TV and read books in our free time.
I consider that watching TV has more disadvantages than advantages. Firstly, during the watching TV we spoil our eyes, which is very harmful for our health. Secondly, instead of wasting our golden time, we can enhance our language grammar by reading books. Thirdly, when we watch various TV series and programs, we have an emotional stress. Furthermore, by getting rattled we might become ill.
As a conclusion, I share of view that reading books more useful than watching TV. If you read books, you are going to develop your imagination and a way of thinking. Books are the best teachers in the world!
Hello, _lolipop_ 1)Thirdly, when we watch various TV series and programs, we have an emotional stress ~ it is not a fact, that you must correct it. Like, In my opinion ... 2)You siad abot harmful sides of watching TV, but you did not say about why reading books is useful with facts and arguments. 3) If you say "statistics" you should give us truth information, fact(diagramms,procents) I hope, that you will correct and repost it in 3rd version.
Books always were best friends of people. They always maximize our strength and minimalize our weakness. Works of different genres and authors conquer hearts of readers. However, nowadays books have the opponent which calls TV. Both of them give information to their audience, but it is not always useful in TV. Books give us chance to be aware of opportunities, thanks to helpful advices which it contains. Also, we mitigate threats in our life thanks to books. Statement says that reading for pleasure better than watching TV.I strongly agree with this opinion. Moreover, I have arguments for that. Firstly, while reading for pleasure, we develop our imagination and creativity, especially fantastic books. You do not need to strain, you just enjoy your reading. It affords us opportunity to forget about daily problems. Secondly, while reading books, we expand our vocabulary. Reader learns new expressions and academic words. Majority of people like to waste their time while watching TV, which contains a lot of trash. TV is a stock of fake information and propaganda . In conclusion, I would like to say, that we need to read more books, instead of cloking our mind with the rubbish from TV.
Hello, Micky Taryan. I liked your essay very much. There are some my advice for you: 1) Books always have been best friends of people. 2) ...especially when reading fiction (fantasy) books. Good job!
How it is going, Micky Taryan. What a nice read your essay! After I read this essay I found out some mistakes and I am willing to give you some advice: 1)In an essay, you have to show the opposite or something else. I mean try to give new ideas. 2)You need to write some advice, examples, conditions and else to beaty and better it. Good job!
Today, after work or lessons people come home and watch TV. When we eat food, have break, have time to sit and watch TV, but sometimes people read books or some teenagers do not watching TV. Teenagers do not watch TV, because they sit on social networks or surf on the internet. Somebody wants to self-development and they read books. ………………………………………………………………………………. I partially agree with that. In my opinion watching TV can helps us, because in TV programs we have documentary channels like ‘national geographic’ or channels help children’s with mind growth like ‘balapan’. However reading books much better. Reading books helps to think out of the box, evolve our imagination. For example, when we have a new teacher she says: “if you want to develop your English skills, you must read National Geographic books”. In one term I was read minimum 5 books and it is help my English skills and knowledge. I know people who read many books and now they have really good vocabulary. In my opinion majority of the books develop imagination and enhance language application skills. ………………………………………………………………………………. In conclusion I would like to say that reading books better than watching TV because reading progress develops our imagination, enhances our thinking, develops creativity and gives new emotions. Read more books instead of surf the internet or watching TV, it is help you future.
After "However" we always put comma because this type of word is transition word. "when a new teacher came to us" instead of " when we have a new teacher"; "I read" instead of "I was read" How do the reading books helps to you?(2 paragraph, 6th sentence); We always put comma after "In my opinion"; " because reading progress develops our imagination,..."What did you mean using the word "progress"? "it will help you in future" instead of "it is help you future."
When we eat food, have break, have time to sit and watch TV, but sometimes people read books or some teenagers do not watching TV. -> While eating or relaxing we have time to sit and watch TV, but some people prefer to read books.
Somebody wants to self-development and they read books. -> On the other hand, people, who want to develop themselves, read books. (On the other hand, somebody reads books to develop himself.)
I partially agree with that. -> I partially agree with the statement that...
In my opinion watching TV can helps us, because in TV programs we have documentary channels like ‘national geographic’ or channels help children’s with mind growth like ‘balapan’. -> In my opinion, watchimg TV helps us, because TV has documentary channels like "National geographic" or channels for children which affect on their critical thinking such as "Balapan".
However reading books much better. -> However, reading books is better than...
Reading books helps to think out of the box, evolve our imagination.-> Thanks to reading books we think out of the box and evolve our imagination.
Good job, Simple panda! Here are my small recommendations about your essay: • However, reading books help us to develop much better, then TV instead of < However reading books much better. • ”. In one term I read minimum 5 books and it helps improve my English skills and develops creativity instead of < ”. In one term I was read minimum 5 books and it is help my English skills and knowledge. • “There are many people, who read a lot of books and their vocabulary is advanced” instead of < I know people who read many books and now they have really good vocabulary. • because reading process develops our imagination instead of “reading progress”. Do not confuse words process and progress. • “ because reading process develops our imagination and creativity, enhances our thinking skills and gives us new emotions and opportunities” instead of “ because reading progress develops our imagination, enhances our thinking, develops creativity and gives new emotions” • “it will help you in future.” Instead of “it is help you future.” • “Today, the majority of people come home after work or lesson and usually start watching TV” instead of “Today, after work or lessons people come home and watch TV” • When we eat food, have break, have time to sit and watch TV, but sometimes people read books or some teenagers do not watching TV. Structure of this sentence is not clear. It will be better --- Sometimes we prefer to watch TV while eating and relaxing because watching TV does not require thinking process. On the other hand, reading requires thinking and analyzing. • Use words such as However, moreover, unfortunately, nevertheless and etc.
From the beginning of life to its end every person works on developing his/her personality. In our modern world, there are a lot of opportunities to tap. Many of them are aimed at developing of people’s invisible sides, maximize creativity and talents. The majority of people prefer watching TV than reading books and in their opinion it is more useful and gives more pleasure. However they need to understand that time is very valuable and it cannot be returned.
I agree with this statement. Since people have learned literacy, they do not stop reading and writing. I am of the view that there is no better hobby than reading a book with a cup of hot tea in a rainy day. I can endlessly continue reading for pleasure and recommend you too. First of all, reading improves person’s creativity and will help you to think out of the box. After reading different books, you will not even notice how you began to compare yourself with the characters of the book and say like they. The contents of books are different, so people should not read only one genre. Be open to read various genres such as classical books and science fiction. Also, it is very important to be aware of that TV gives people temporary pleasure. One must remember that after watching TV, instead of feeling rested you feel tired. Some TV programs are indeed useful and informative. However, I do not think that noisy news, meaningless TV series, boring films and not wise cartoons are better than books. I am not talking about all of them, but some of them may waste our precious time. If people continue to waste time watching not-deep TV shows, the world will stop developing and will stay in its place. Moreover, books develops our language skills as they uses academic and artistic language. Every reader may open the world of new words, which will be useful for everybody. Unfortunately, some TV programs do not use half of those words that are written in books.
In conclusion, I would like to say that reading for pleasure is one of the most useful and rare activities that brings not only pleasure but also benefits for people. It's never too late to start reading. Reading is what is fashionable now.
Dear "Freya", I liked your essay, because it full of new words and phrases for me. At the same time you have some minor mistakes such as: • You should put comma after linking words like "However"(1 paragraph, last sentence) • You can not forget about articles. For example "rare activities that brings" before "rare activities you should put article "a". • " It's never too late to start reading" In my mind you cannot say like this, it will sound better like this" It's never late to start reading" Good job♥ XOXO
Nowadays majority of people average 75% use a social media, 20% watch TV everyday as well as others do something like reading books. I do not know what can be found in social media and in TV news, channels. It is a one of global problems in our society. Mass media just washed a brain as give information about what people want to listen. For example, they are some boring films and cartoons which do not help to improve or develop a person’s creativity. Watching television can critique to person. On the other hand reading books for pleasure gives us more information than watching TV. Moreover, reading for pleasure develops your imagination, improves language skills and helps to understand the main idea of the book. It is a good opportunity to change person’s view, it forces to think out of the box and develop creativity. For example, in 7grade 3 term we started to read a National Geographic books. I think this books really help me in improving language skills. You can eradicate bore and enjoy reading, it is a fact about developing and better language skill than watching TV, scientists are proved this statement. In my point of view, instead of spend your time on social media , people should spend their precious time on reading books. I am of the view that books gives us more real information, some helpful advances and develops our lexicon
In conclusion, If we want to achieve our purpose, goals we must break away from TV, Social media, instead of this we should self-develop with reading books. Books are our treasure.
-Write your opinion separately, not in the beginning ("I do not know what can be found in social media and in TV news, channels") -Mass media just BRAINWASHING (you can find this word on the Internet) -Critique a person (not "TO") -Give a full information about its critisizing -It is not the correct using of "on the other hand", because firstly you wrote about television, and secondly you wrote about reading. If you are discussing a good and bad sides, you can write "on the other hand", but not when you are talking about two different things -it developS creativity -scientists proved -"..., if ..., we must break away from TV, social media..." Good job!
Nowadays, person’s brain is in a difficult situation. People replace reading fascinating books with watching big screens of televisions. It is clear that it is going to affect the development of humanity. From a long time ago, people knew that reading is a valuable way of evolving. Firstly, reading is the main part of developing imagination and creativity. Due to while person reads, he imagines and presents numerous number of pictures in his mind. However, TV shows us ready pictures, which may interrupt the development of our imagination, so that people can’t think outside of the box. Actually, language skills such as vocabulary and grammar develop by reading too. I would like to share with my own experience about reading national geographic books, which I started in grade 7. Somebody can say that it is boring and not useful pastime as he or she is sure. Despite this, during reading these books I learn many academic words, improve my English grammar and memory skills. Memory is a thing, which we can practice by reading amazing books with different information. TV does less benefit, than reading. That is obviously clear. Unfortunately, today the majority of people continue to spend their free time on watching TV and only minor amount do not forget about a world inside astonishing books.
Dear, Good Reader. I fascinated with your essay, because you have very good ideas and many academic words, which demonstrates your language skills. However, I have some advices for you: maybe it will be nice, if you will write “finished” instead of “ready”, words instead of numbers (7-seven).
Hello, good_reader. Your essay became much better. There are some advice for you: 1. Despite this, during reading these books I have learned many academic words, I have improved my English grammar and memory skills. 2.Memory is a thing, which we can develop by reading amazing books with different information. Great job!
Have you ever thought about how important books are? How many of good ideas you had lost leaving books on your old shelves? People rather watch TV than read books, and this can make a difference in the not-so-distant future.
Books are just like teachers, they teach us how to think. They help us to maximize our strengths and minimize our weaknesses. While reading, person uses his own imagination to create images of characters, buildings, even whole countries in his mind! Is this comparable to what the TV offers? Ready-made thoughts, prepared phrases and no need to think. I guess that's what attracts people so much. All that remains after watching TV is wasted time.
Moreover, books are truly useful, when person learns new language, because they improve vocabulary, sentence structure and grammar. They help to develop reading skills and critical thinking. I have a life example. After changing my school my English level was not bad, but I did not know a lot at the same time. In that case, reading helped me to develop and taught me how to think out of the box. I started reading actively, especially National Geographic books. I wrote down every new word for me, and for now I have got the thick notebook full of useful words and phrases. It has been a long way learning, but I am aware of that it was not in vain. I believe that it will affect my future.
Reading is a pleasure, which everyone can get easily. So instead of wasting free time, better read more!
Hello "Hopefull Girl" I am able to say that your essay is fascinating. However, you have some flaws such as: • You are not able to ask question in your essay • "I have a life example." → I have example from life" XOXO ♥♥♥
Reading for pleasure develops the imagination and betters the language skills than watching TV does. I partially agree with this statement, because both of them have advantages and disadvantages. Let’s start with reading. Of course, reading is always good, because it really helps to us to develop our imagination and language skills. All of us create perfect images of characters from books and that’s why it is good for our brain and imagination. Moreover, when we are reading, we should pay attention to the structure of sentences. Then it will teach us correct grammar and structure. We also say: “The book is the best teacher”, what is true. I learned a lot of new words in my life thanks to books, and it does not matter in which language, and I spent my time with pleasure. Concerning television I would like to give an example from my life. Before saying something, I want to example one thing. Now, my little sisters and brothers are aware of how to count up to ten and more, thanks to children’s channels on TV. Moreover, their pronunciation is very good for their young age. I share the view that there are some advantages of watching TV such as: developing listening skills and learning something new. Occasionally, we all want to relax for some time and the TV comes to rescue us by offering good channels. Some funny shows help us when we really need some help. However, it has disadvantages too. One of the reasons why I do not have time is that I waste my time watching TV. I spent my time with pleasure in both cases. However, in my opinion, we also need to spend our time for useful things. So, reading has more useful advantages, than watching TV and if we will read books more, we will maximize our strengths and minimize our weaknesses by learning.
Good afternoon, Hannah 21. Essay is very well, because of prospective thinking and interesting examples from your life. You should fix some minor mistakes:
1)"really helps to us ... " --> "really helps us "; 2)"I want to example one thing." I did not understand that part of sentence. May be like that --> " I want to give an example. 3) As you writing advantages and disadvantages of television, you should to write advantages(you wrote) and disadvantages of reading, too.)
Hello Hannah21! Thanks for your post! I agree with The Hero of Our World's three comments above.
In addition: 1) After "The book is the best teacher" it should read 'which is true' (not 'what is true") 2) When you said "advantages of watching TV such as:" you can remove the colon as this sentence does not require a colon.
I liked how you were able to describe the different ways that we can learn from both reading and TV :)
With the development of television people forget about books that really advance their imagination and language skills. Television plays an important role in our life. Every day we turn on the TV and watch news or films. To eat and watch simultaneously is comfortable and it becomes a part of our routine. For someone television is his or her work. There are so many reporters, operators and speakers who work very hard to provide as more new information as they can. However, if we overdo watching TV, it will bad affect us. Therefore, we cannot stop reading. I totally agree with the statement that reading for pleasure evolves the fancy and language skills than watching TV does. Firstly, we see figures in our mind during reading. Concerning television it shows you ready pictures, your phantasy and creativity do not become better. Secondly, while reading we memorize sentence structures and replenish our vocabulary. On the other hand, when you watch videos you hear the audio and do not remember all information. In my own experience, reading is the most useful way if you want to refine. I watched American films but it was hard for me to learn new words. Of course, I carry on do that for my listening and speaking. However, I noticed a real progress when I started to read National geographic books in grade seven. These little books contain a lot of academic words. Furthermore, the majority of the stories are fascinating. There are levels so that you can improve your skills step by step. In conclusion I want to say that everybody has the freedom to choose but I advise you to read instead of watching TV.
1) "For someone" television is his or her work should be "for some people". 2) "as more" should be "as much" new information as they can. 3) You've claimed that watching too much TV will have a bad effect on us. Can you elaborate further what this "bad effect" could be? Convince your reader! 4) "phantasy" is spelt "fantasy" 5) Great vocabulary in your use of "replenish"!! Good work!
People always think that it is better to watch television than read a book. However, watching TV is decreasing our critical thinking and imagination because the television always shows us opinions of other people. By listening other people our critical thinking will never start to develop. So I recommend you to read books. There are many pluses here! By reading we can improve our creativity and thinking because while reading we picture the location, people and their feelings. Moreover, we start living inside of the book and experiencing whatever the characters of the book feel. Honestly, when I started to read national geographic books, I thought that it will never help me. However, national geographic books really affected to me and I understood that it is very helpful to improve language skills by reading. Firstly, books can increase your vocabulary. It really helps you, when you need to say something in different word, but keep the meaning of that word too. Secondly, reading books improve your grammar. After reading some books you will start pay attention to sentence structure, grammatical mistakes and other small, but important things. Furthermore, by learning something new, we can minimize our weaknesses. I think, that you will agree with my opinion that we have more advantages in reading books than in watching TV.
Hello, "Young Jake"! I am posting this comment because I found your ideas new and interesting. You have presented your personal experience and used good vocabulary, so your essay is of good quality! Thank you for your hard work!
Some mistakes I found: 1 paragraph, 2 sentence. Add something after the verb - "watching TV is decreasing our critical thinking skills" 1 paragraph, 3 sentence. "By listening to other people" 2 paragraph, 1 sentence. Point out where we picture things and add smth to the word "thinking", do not use verb as a noun - "By reading we can improve our creativity and thinking skills because while reading we picture the location, people and their feelings in our minds. " 3 paragraph, 2 sentence. Do not use "to" after the verb "affect" - "Really affected me" 4 paragraph, 2 sentence. "when we need to say something in different words" or "when we need to paraphras" + "while keeping the meaning of our words".
Nowadays, in the 21 century, in the epoch of new information technologies and robotics, Internet and television are playing important role in our life. Today’s life cannot be imagined without smartphones and gadgets. Consequently, every human spend much more than 2-3 hours per day by surfing in the Internet, watching TV channels and browsing news in social networks. Because of this, television gradually replaces books, and it turns to a global problem. Television badly affects on people. In recent years, by watching films, advertisements and movies human society developed in oneself “clip thinking”. It means that people’ memory stores information as a short video. The concentration and level of learning become low. Watching TV gives us a lot of information, but sometimes not needful. It’s been proved that reading for pleasure develops the imagination and language skills. When you read books, you receive a lot of interesting and needful information. I would like to say that I started reading since 5-6 years. I very like books about adventures and sci-fi. It really develops my imagination and grammar skills. I completely agree with the statement belong, because as a result people changed thinking and became addicted of new gadgets and television.
Hello, The Hero of Our World. Thank you for publishing version 2.
1." day by surfing in the Internet" - you cannot say "surfing in the Internet", "surf the internet" will be correct. Check the meaning, please. For example : "Do you surf the internet a lot?".
2. " Consequently, every human spend much more than 2-3 hours" - you said in general, however, it is your opinion and it is not a fact. Not all people or every human spending theit time like this. Add the expression "In my point of view" or "The majority of people prefer to - - - ".
3."... television are playing important role in our life" - people may disagree with you, so change it like " ... television are playing important role in people's life" or write about affects.
4. "Television badly affects on people." - it is your opinion(!). When you want to say something, remember to add "In my opinion" or "I am of the view that".
5. Unfortunatelly, I cannot see a comparison. Give more arguments and examples.
Hi, dear The Hero of Our World! I am writing this comment to share my point about your essay. Your work has several benefits such us a good introduction part, negative effects of watching TV and amazing ideas about clip thinking. Moreover, now thanks to you I am aware of knowledge that a phrase "clip thinking" means that people’ memory stores information as a short video. In addition, thank you very much for your hard work! Consequently, I have some advice for you: 1) the 1st sentence - 1st paragraph. * Must be "The Internet and a television", because the internet is one in the world as well as the Sun and the Moon. Furthemore, a word "tellevision" needs an article "a". * It is better to write this sentence in Present Simple. It will be like "the Internet and a television play an important role in our liVES". I consider, you can not write it in the Present Continuous. Due to a rule "Present Continuous is used for action happening at the moment" and "Present Simple is used for habits, rutines and facts" . Here the usage of the internet and television is as our routine and habit. So it is better to use the Present Simple. Good luck with your future works, honey =)))
Imagination and language skills are mainly developed by reading books and watching the television. However, television is more popular than books in that aspect. People like television because of its functionality and variety of information, which it could provide, but is it really a better version of books?
Television is more modern than books. It has many functions, which books do not have. It shows us visualized information and provides new ideas audibly, there is a variety of channels and just by switching them you could find information almost for all spheres in life. People choose it because reading books is a more troublesome way to find information.
Although, the quantity of books is enormous, finding an appropriate one is difficult. Using remote controller is much easier. To read books we need to have patience: we need to find a quiet and peaceful environment, so that others could not disturb us, we need to be in a place with good lighting, so that our eyes will not become tired, we need to immerse ourselves in books, so that we do not miss its content. On the other side, to watch TV we only need to buy one, install it inside a house, put batteries into a remote controller and then enjoy watching TV programs.
Nevertheless, all the “trouble” we go through while pleasure reading is a valuable experience. This “trouble” is what makes pleasure reading so attractive. Only through enduring hardships could we gain something truly precious. That is one of the main reasons reading is considered more beneficial than television.
Earlier I loved watching TV very much. There I could find plenty of information, which interested me. I liked watching cartoons and movies, found programs with information related to my past hobbies and learned from them. However, I also read books at the same time. I spent my days watching TV, but when interesting books “arrived” I read them with pleasure for days and weeks without stop.
Evidently books always interested me more than TV. “Why is that?” – you may ask. The answer is not too obvious, however. When I watch TV I feel myself an outsider, I could not immerse myself with the world shown there. Trying to forcefully do so only made me feel worse. So, with the flow of time TV programs became dull for me and I completely stopped watching them.
On the other hand, reading books never became boring and even now books and stories interest me the most. My English vocabulary as well as my ideas and thought process progressed while the quantity of books I read increased. From my POV, books and stories promote people’s minds and influence their thinking in a better way than television.
Hello again, BrokenSapphire. It is a pleasure to get to read another one of your essays. I continue to see improvement in your writing skills, so keep up the good work.
Intro: Not a bad introduction, but make sure you are addressing the topic of the essay directly. The essay prompt states that "It has been proven that reading for pleasure develops the imagination better than TV." It is asking if you agree or disagree. Your first sentence, introduction and the whole first part of the essay puts reading and TV watching on the same level. Therefore, your essay is NOT addressing the topic. Be careful of this as it will hurt your "task achievement" scores.
Para. 1: You don't need a "the" before "television", and there should be no comma between "information" and "which". Beware of using rhetorical questions in essays. This is informal and should not appear in a formal essay.
Para. 2: Again, watch the commas in your complex sentences. Remember that if the independent clause is first, there should be no comma before the subordinating conjunction (no comma between "functions" and "which"). Also, there should be either a full stop or conjunction (FANBOYS) between "audibly" and "there".
Para. 3: There should be no comma after "Although", and the list after the statement: "To read books we need to have patience:" should probably be three compound sentences and not one long list. This sentence is confusing because of it's length.
Para. 5: A comma should be after "Earlier" in the first sentence, and "there" in the 2nd sentence is not needed. There should be a comma in between "arrived" and "I" in the last sentence.
Para. 6: There should be a comma after "Evidently", and again, be careful with rhetorical questions. There should be a comma after the statement "when I watch TV", and a full stop after "outsider". There should be a comma after "with the flow of time", and one between "me" and "and" (FANBOYS).
Para. 7: There should be a comma between "boring" and "and". Don't use acronyms like "POV" in an essay; spell the words out.
Conclusion: You should not wait until the end of the essay to make your opposing points. The concluding paragraph should have been a body paragraph.
Overall: You have written a good essay, but beware of small grammar mistakes (mainly the use of commas). Make sure you address the topic directly, and try not to use rhetorical questions in a formal essay.
“When I was your age, television was called books” say writer William Goldman, because now television has replaced books. Teenagers all the free time sitting in the internet and maximum read magazines about fashion or cosmetic. But it’s bad or not?
Books educate us. For example, reading develops our grammar and punctuation. We maximize our vocabulary by reading books. For example, I read books in Russian language as the result I know how to use punctuation marks while I write.
Books train our imagination. We receive only ready information by watching television as a result our imagination does not evolve. Conversely when we read books we start imagining. For example, in my childhood my mother used to read fairy tales to me before I went to bed.
Books help to learn new languages and cognize new culture of other nationals. I am aware of opportunities developing knowledge of other ethnic groups for our generation. For example, it’s help to me with English languages. I read “national geographic”, it is interesting books about all. You can found information about new technology, another interesting place and my favorite about other types of animals.
It is evident that knowledge is power. Without it we might not be able to mitigate threats around us. Reading books gives us knowledge that we can use in this life. For example, books about psychology help me with public speaking.
Good afternoon, Marshal Lee! I like your essay, because of big amount of academic words and examples from your life. However, there some mistakes that should be fixen:
1) "You can found ..." --> "You can find ..."; 2) "Teenagers all the free time sitting ..." --> " Teenagers all the free time sit in the Internet ..."; 3) You said about teenagers, which sit in the Internet. Moreover, you asked a question "But it’s bad or not?". Then you say about advantages of books. Why??? There no logic conception. You should say about disadvantages of television, and then smoothly shift to the books. 4)In conclusion we should not add instances. It should have been added in main part of the text. 5)"by watching television as a result our imagination does not evolve." before "as a result" we should put "and". 6)"say writer" --> "said writer";
In main, your essay is well. and I liked it! Keep working and do your best :)
>Paragraph 3, 3rd sentence, we always put comma after words like "Conversely", "However", "Furthermore" etc. because there are transition words. >When you want to say about something in plural form, do not use "is". For example: "it is interesting books"-->"there are interesting books" >We never start our questions like this "But it's bad or not?", structure of the question is "am/is/are+subject+body" >pafragraph 4, sentence 3 "English language*" >pafragraph 4, sentence 4 "I am read "national geographic", it is interesting books about something(add your information here)" >pafragraph 4, sentence 5 "You can find* information on* new technology, interesting place and my favorite about different* types of animals."
In our 21st century new technologies are developing very fast. Moreover, television was invented last century. In spite of the fact that most people prefer spending their leisure time watching TV, books are still with us. Moreover, writers did not disappear, yet, so people stop reading.
Firstly, I want to say about our imagination. When we read even though we do not see anything we start picturing characters and events in our mind. Person chooses clothing, eyes, generally everything s/he wants. It will be like we are living on another planet, when person reading it is like he is with his dreams. On the other hand when we watch television I am of the view that we do not think, but only look at a blue screen. Maybe we will not like externality of person. For example: we may response main character as 20 -25 years old handsome man, with lush hairs and perfect snow-white smile, but at film it completely different.
Let’s talk about language skills. When we are watching television, we don’t think about anything besides film. Admit honestly, do you think how spelling this word or using this or that grammatical rule wrong, while watching film? However, when person is reading book, he subconsciously learning some grammatical.
For example: Our class, we are reading “National Geographic” from 7th grade. In my mind we write much better than before. From these books I learn words, collocations, such as: mournful thought, gentle sorrow, misfortune, meanwhile and many other words. Moreover, I think that my and my classmates’ grammar was improved a lot. Firstly, when I start read books I did not understand some information. Always browse some word and collocations. However, right now it is easier for me to read books, I am able to understand and learn new information.
I can say that reading books much better than watching TV. Furthermore, reading develops imagination and language skills than television. XOXO
it completely different -> it is completely different he subconsciously learning some grammatical -> he is subconsciously learning new grammar rules.(it is better to say "learnes") reading books much better than watching TV -> reading books is much better than watching TV Please do not repeat the words, try to use the synonyms. Do not forget to put a coma after linking words.
In our leisure time we like to do what we want. We enjoy it and delight. However, we need to start thinking about its help for our development. I partially agree that reading for pleasure advances our imagination and improves language proficiency more than watching TV. When we are reading a book, we are aware of opportunity to better English language skills, because we can learn new words for us, and find a material about anything, develop ourselves with necessary information. Furthermore, people visualize characters, actions that happening in the plot, which can effect to the development of imagination. Thirdly, while reading we pay more attention for words than we watch the TV. Sometimes in the book we can notice definitions of words. Also book describes happening actions more detailed. Try to maximize your strengths, so you can affect yourself and height language skills. It mitigates threats, such as illiteracy and inadvertence. Nevertheless, watching TV can influence to us from the good sides, too. It develops our imagination. For example, cartoons illustrate pictures in colors and make the character’s voices, give full information of the occasion. Films can show some historic or vital situations that were in people’s life, so that we will be able to understand and conceive its significance. TV programs give us information from all over the world, about the last news. Consequently, both reading for pleasure and watching TV impacts to our development at all if we use and take its maximum benefits. If you minimize your weaknesses like laziness, and start to read books you can build your successful future.
Hey, "BlackPink". I liked reading your essay. Moreover I found from it a lot of new phrases, expressions and words for me (inadvertence, illiteracy). Thank you for it! However you have some mistakes such as: • "we need to start thinking about its help for our development." I thin you should put comma after "about" or rewrite like this: "we need to start thinking about it will help for our development." • "Thirdly, while reading we pay more attention for words than" → "Thirdly, while reading we pay more attention to words than" I think it is all your mistakes . Good job♥ XOXO
actions that happening in the plot -> actions that are happening
Thirdly, while reading we pay more attention for words than we watch the TV. -> Thirdly, compared with watcing TV while reading we pay more attention for words.
Sometimes in the book we can notice definitions of words. Also book describes happening actions more detailed. (It seems to me that in these sentenсe you need to write "books" because you talk in general)
Moreover, I think it will be better if you write about your own experience. Good luck!
Some people consider watching TV, reading books or doing other stuff as their favorite activity. Moreover, we need to understand that reading for pleasure improves our imagination, makes us a little bit smarter, teaches us some expressions and ideas, betters our language skills as well as affects our knowledge and understanding about the world. Starting from second part of 7th grade my classmates and I began reading books of “National Geographic" series. All of us found them boring, not interesting. We thought that reading them would not help. However, it should be accepted that our skills have been increasing by reading these books. Although some books were interesting, helpful and full of information about our world. In one book you will read about long journeys to find part of ancient kings of the Earth, dinosaurs, or in another book you will find out about bright colorful hummingbirds which live on tropical islands, you can meet stories about eastern countries, water pollution, in daggered whales and many more. Here you find out slangs in English, new expressions or other meanings of well-known word, and all of them made us more skillful. You can surf the internet to search thousand examples from lives of hundred famous people. Thus I agree with this statement, but not completely because TV shows can affect you as books, too. Watching shows or other actions are going to help you if they are done for pleasure. For example, I start to study English language thanks to computer games. When I saw words on unknown English for me, I started to compare them with Russian, so I find out new words. However, they were simple like menu, kick, man, tree, and others. These examples are counting for hundreds, starting from TV until gaming. In conclusion, I am willing to share the view that every activity that done for pleasure, especially reading will improve your skills and influence positively on your life and imagination. So let us doing it because knows language is way to communicate with other people as well as to express yourself, and let’s do it correctly.
It's been proved that reading for pleasure develops the imagination and betters the language skills than watching TV does.
ReplyDeleteNowadays lots of people prefer watching TV rather than reading books. It became a social problem. People do not pay attention to books and they started spending most of their time watching TV.
I partially agree with this statement because people are developed their imagination and language skills by reading books. There are a lot of people assert that watching TV is much better than reading books.
I can prove this by giving these arguments. At first book is the main source of knowledge. Books teach us how to be more successful and find yourself in this world. Most of the people who read books have better thinking skills and imagination. At second you can choose what do you to read, however you cannot do the same things with TV. When the person want to spend his/her free time by watching TV the person will watch programs that TV have. The person will just change the channels to find appropriate show. Thirdly, TV are full of improper cartoons and films. People who are watch these programs cannot think out of the box. People are becoming the slaves of TV. So, nowadays the majority of the people are declining from reading books. It is very disturbing problem. Again, the reading and writing skill of a person can be developed by reading a book. Only watching television programs are not a good choice to advance these skills. We must remember that watching TV eradicate out health and creative thinking.
In conclusion I would like to say that only by reading books people advance their life. The TV does not stop people from thinking, but it makes it so that people forget about each other.
Thank you !
* people are developed their imagination - people develop their imagination (failed usage of passive voice, please read about it here
Deletehttps://www.native-english.ru/grammar/passive-voice)
* There are a lot of people assert that watching TV - There are a lot of people, WHO assert that watching TV
* prove this by giving these arguments - prove this by giving SOME arguments (it is not good to repeat the eord twice "this, these")
Nowadays, statistics indicate that an index of watching TV decreased because of well-spread internet connections. However, reading for pleasure always remains relevant.
ReplyDeleteI have been watching TV since I was 3 years old. Therefore, I regret now that I have been wasting my time. I might have become better in science if I read a lot of books.
I completely agree with the statement above. There are resemblances and differences between them. One of the resemblances is that they provide information and broaden our purviews. Moreover, since they are types of hobbies, we can watch TV and read books in our free time.
I consider that watching TV has more disadvantages than advantages. Firstly, during the watching TV we spoil our eyes, which is very harmful for our health. Secondly, instead of wasting our golden time, we can enhance our language grammar by reading books. Thirdly, when we watch various TV series and programs, we have an emotional stress. Furthermore, by getting rattled we might become ill.
As a conclusion, I share of view that reading books more useful than watching TV. If you read books, you are going to develop your imagination and a way of thinking. Books are the best teachers in the world!
Hello, _lolipop_
Delete1)Thirdly, when we watch various TV series and programs, we have an emotional stress ~ it is not a fact, that you must correct it. Like, In my opinion ...
2)You siad abot harmful sides of watching TV, but you did not say about why reading books is useful with facts and arguments.
3) If you say "statistics" you should give us truth information, fact(diagramms,procents)
I hope, that you will correct and repost it in 3rd version.
Books always were best friends of people. They always maximize our strength and minimalize our weakness. Works of different genres and authors conquer hearts of readers. However, nowadays books have the opponent which calls TV. Both of them give information to their audience, but it is not always useful in TV. Books give us chance to be aware of opportunities, thanks to helpful advices which it contains. Also, we mitigate threats in our life thanks to books.
ReplyDeleteStatement says that reading for pleasure better than watching TV.I strongly agree with this opinion. Moreover, I have arguments for that.
Firstly, while reading for pleasure, we develop our imagination and creativity, especially fantastic books. You do not need to strain, you just enjoy your reading. It affords us opportunity to forget about daily problems.
Secondly, while reading books, we expand our vocabulary. Reader learns new expressions and academic words.
Majority of people like to waste their time while watching TV, which contains a lot of trash. TV is a stock of fake information and propaganda .
In conclusion, I would like to say, that we need to read more books, instead of cloking our mind with the rubbish from TV.
Hello, Micky Taryan. I liked your essay very much. There are some my advice for you:
Delete1) Books always have been best friends of people.
2) ...especially when reading fiction (fantasy) books.
Good job!
How it is going, Micky Taryan. What a nice read your essay! After I read this essay I found out some mistakes and I am willing to give you some advice:
Delete1)In an essay, you have to show the opposite or something else. I mean try to give new ideas.
2)You need to write some advice, examples, conditions and else to beaty and better it.
Good job!
Today, after work or lessons people come home and watch TV. When we eat food, have break, have time to sit and watch TV, but sometimes people read books or some teenagers do not watching TV. Teenagers do not watch TV, because they sit on social networks or surf on the internet. Somebody wants to self-development and they read books.
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I partially agree with that. In my opinion watching TV can helps us, because in TV programs we have documentary channels like ‘national geographic’ or channels help children’s with mind growth like ‘balapan’. However reading books much better. Reading books helps to think out of the box, evolve our imagination. For example, when we have a new teacher she says: “if you want to develop your English skills, you must read National Geographic books”. In one term I was read minimum 5 books and it is help my English skills and knowledge. I know people who read many books and now they have really good vocabulary. In my opinion majority of the books develop imagination and enhance language application skills.
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In conclusion I would like to say that reading books better than watching TV because reading progress develops our imagination, enhances our thinking, develops creativity and gives new emotions. Read more books instead of surf the internet or watching TV, it is help you future.
After "However" we always put comma because this type of word is transition word.
Delete"when a new teacher came to us" instead of " when we have a new teacher";
"I read" instead of "I was read"
How do the reading books helps to you?(2 paragraph, 6th sentence);
We always put comma after "In my opinion";
" because reading progress develops our imagination,..."What did you mean using the word "progress"?
"it will help you in future" instead of "it is help you future."
When we eat food, have break, have time to sit and watch TV, but sometimes people read books or some teenagers do not watching TV. -> While eating or relaxing we have time to sit and watch TV, but some people prefer to read books.
DeleteSomebody wants to self-development and they read books. -> On the other hand, people, who want to develop themselves, read books. (On the other hand, somebody reads books to develop himself.)
I partially agree with that. -> I partially agree with the statement that...
In my opinion watching TV can helps us, because in TV programs we have documentary channels like ‘national geographic’ or channels help children’s with mind growth like ‘balapan’. -> In my opinion, watchimg TV helps us, because TV has documentary channels like "National geographic" or channels for children which affect on their critical thinking such as "Balapan".
However reading books much better. -> However, reading books is better than...
Reading books helps to think out of the box, evolve our imagination.-> Thanks to reading books we think out of the box and evolve our imagination.
Good job, Simple panda! Here are my small recommendations about your essay:
Delete• However, reading books help us to develop much better, then TV instead of < However reading books much better.
• ”. In one term I read minimum 5 books and it helps improve my English skills and develops creativity instead of < ”. In one term I was read minimum 5 books and it is help my English skills and knowledge.
• “There are many people, who read a lot of books and their vocabulary is advanced” instead of < I know people who read many books and now they have really good vocabulary.
• because reading process develops our imagination instead of “reading progress”. Do not confuse words process and progress.
• “ because reading process develops our imagination and creativity, enhances our thinking skills and gives us new emotions and opportunities” instead of “ because reading progress develops our imagination, enhances our thinking, develops creativity and gives new emotions”
• “it will help you in future.” Instead of “it is help you future.”
• “Today, the majority of people come home after work or lesson and usually start watching TV” instead of “Today, after work or lessons people come home and watch TV”
• When we eat food, have break, have time to sit and watch TV, but sometimes people read books or some teenagers do not watching TV. Structure of this sentence is not clear. It will be better --- Sometimes we prefer to watch TV while eating and relaxing because watching TV does not require thinking process. On the other hand, reading requires thinking and analyzing.
• Use words such as However, moreover, unfortunately, nevertheless and etc.
Dear , SimplePanda !
DeleteIt seems to me that you did not take into consideration my recommendation. Please, be carefull .
From the beginning of life to its end every person works on developing his/her personality. In our modern world, there are a lot of opportunities to tap. Many of them are aimed at developing of people’s invisible sides, maximize creativity and talents. The majority of people prefer watching TV than reading books and in their opinion it is more useful and gives more pleasure. However they need to understand that time is very valuable and it cannot be returned.
ReplyDeleteI agree with this statement. Since people have learned literacy, they do not stop reading and writing. I am of the view that there is no better hobby than reading a book with a cup of hot tea in a rainy day. I can endlessly continue reading for pleasure and recommend you too. First of all, reading improves person’s creativity and will help you to think out of the box. After reading different books, you will not even notice how you began to compare yourself with the characters of the book and say like they. The contents of books are different, so people should not read only one genre. Be open to read various genres such as classical books and science fiction. Also, it is very important to be aware of that TV gives people temporary pleasure. One must remember that after watching TV, instead of feeling rested you feel tired. Some TV programs are indeed useful and informative. However, I do not think that noisy news, meaningless TV series, boring films and not wise cartoons are better than books. I am not talking about all of them, but some of them may waste our precious time. If people continue to waste time watching not-deep TV shows, the world will stop developing and will stay in its place. Moreover, books develops our language skills as they uses academic and artistic language. Every reader may open the world of new words, which will be useful for everybody. Unfortunately, some TV programs do not use half of those words that are written in books.
In conclusion, I would like to say that reading for pleasure is one of the most useful and rare activities that brings not only pleasure but also benefits for people. It's never too late to start reading. Reading is what is fashionable now.
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DeleteDear "Freya", I liked your essay, because it full of new words and phrases for me. At the same time you have some minor mistakes such as:
Delete• You should put comma after linking words like "However"(1 paragraph, last sentence)
• You can not forget about articles. For example "rare activities that brings" before "rare activities you should put article "a".
• " It's never too late to start reading" In my mind you cannot say like this, it will sound better like this" It's never late to start reading"
Good job♥
XOXO
Nowadays majority of people average 75% use a social media, 20% watch TV everyday as well as others do something like reading books. I do not know what can be found in social media and in TV news, channels. It is a one of global problems in our society.
ReplyDeleteMass media just washed a brain as give information about what people want to listen. For example, they are some boring films and cartoons which do not help to improve or develop a person’s creativity. Watching television can critique to person.
On the other hand reading books for pleasure gives us more information than watching TV. Moreover, reading for pleasure develops your imagination, improves language skills and helps to understand the main idea of the book. It is a good opportunity to change person’s view, it forces to think out of the box and develop creativity. For example, in 7grade 3 term we started to read a National Geographic books. I think this books really help me in improving language skills. You can eradicate bore and enjoy reading, it is a fact about developing and better language skill than watching TV, scientists are proved this statement. In my point of view, instead of spend your time on social media , people should spend their precious time on reading books. I am of the view that books gives us more real information, some helpful advances and develops our lexicon
In conclusion, If we want to achieve our purpose, goals we must break away from TV, Social media, instead of this we should self-develop with reading books. Books are our treasure.
-Write your opinion separately, not in the beginning ("I do not know what can be found in social media and in TV news, channels")
Delete-Mass media just BRAINWASHING (you can find this word on the Internet)
-Critique a person (not "TO")
-Give a full information about its critisizing
-It is not the correct using of "on the other hand", because firstly you wrote about television, and secondly you wrote about reading. If you are discussing a good and bad sides, you can write "on the other hand", but not when you are talking about two different things
-it developS creativity
-scientists proved
-"..., if ..., we must break away from TV, social media..."
Good job!
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ReplyDeleteNowadays, person’s brain is in a difficult situation. People replace reading fascinating books with watching big screens of televisions. It is clear that it is going to affect the development of humanity.
ReplyDeleteFrom a long time ago, people knew that reading is a valuable way of evolving. Firstly, reading is the main part of developing imagination and creativity. Due to while person reads, he imagines and presents numerous number of pictures in his mind. However, TV shows us ready pictures, which may interrupt the development of our imagination, so that people can’t think outside of the box.
Actually, language skills such as vocabulary and grammar develop by reading too. I would like to share with my own experience about reading national geographic books, which I started in grade 7. Somebody can say that it is boring and not useful pastime as he or she is sure. Despite this, during reading these books I learn many academic words, improve my English grammar and memory skills. Memory is a thing, which we can practice by reading amazing books with different information.
TV does less benefit, than reading. That is obviously clear. Unfortunately, today the majority of people continue to spend their free time on watching TV and only minor amount do not forget about a world inside astonishing books.
Dear, Good Reader. I fascinated with your essay, because you have very good ideas and many academic words, which demonstrates your language skills. However, I have some advices for you: maybe it will be nice, if you will write “finished” instead of “ready”, words instead of numbers (7-seven).
DeleteHello, good_reader. Your essay became much better. There are some advice for you:
Delete1. Despite this, during reading these books I have learned many academic words, I have improved my English grammar and memory skills.
2.Memory is a thing, which we can develop by reading amazing books with different information.
Great job!
Have you ever thought about how important books are? How many of good ideas you had lost leaving books on your old shelves? People rather watch TV than read books, and this can make a difference in the not-so-distant future.
ReplyDeleteBooks are just like teachers, they teach us how to think. They help us to maximize our strengths and minimize our weaknesses. While reading, person uses his own imagination to create images of characters, buildings, even whole countries in his mind! Is this comparable to what the TV offers? Ready-made thoughts, prepared phrases and no need to think. I guess that's what attracts people so much. All that remains after watching TV is wasted time.
Moreover, books are truly useful, when person learns new language, because they improve vocabulary, sentence structure and grammar. They help to develop reading skills and critical thinking. I have a life example. After changing my school my English level was not bad, but I did not know a lot at the same time. In that case, reading helped me to develop and taught me how to think out of the box. I started reading actively, especially National Geographic books. I wrote down every new word for me, and for now I have got the thick notebook full of useful words and phrases. It has been a long way learning, but I am aware of that it was not in vain. I believe that it will affect my future.
Reading is a pleasure, which everyone can get easily. So instead of wasting free time, better read more!
Hello "Hopefull Girl" I am able to say that your essay is fascinating. However, you have some flaws such as:
Delete• You are not able to ask question in your essay
• "I have a life example." → I have example from life"
XOXO ♥♥♥
Reading for pleasure develops the imagination and betters the language skills than watching TV does.
ReplyDeleteI partially agree with this statement, because both of them have advantages and disadvantages.
Let’s start with reading. Of course, reading is always good, because it really helps to us to develop our imagination and language skills. All of us create perfect images of characters from books and that’s why it is good for our brain and imagination. Moreover, when we are reading, we should pay attention to the structure of sentences. Then it will teach us correct grammar and structure. We also say: “The book is the best teacher”, what is true. I learned a lot of new words in my life thanks to books, and it does not matter in which language, and I spent my time with pleasure.
Concerning television I would like to give an example from my life. Before saying something, I want to example one thing. Now, my little sisters and brothers are aware of how to count up to ten and more, thanks to children’s channels on TV. Moreover, their pronunciation is very good for their young age. I share the view that there are some advantages of watching TV such as: developing listening skills and learning something new. Occasionally, we all want to relax for some time and the TV comes to rescue us by offering good channels. Some funny shows help us when we really need some help. However, it has disadvantages too. One of the reasons why I do not have time is that I waste my time watching TV.
I spent my time with pleasure in both cases. However, in my opinion, we also need to spend our time for useful things. So, reading has more useful advantages, than watching TV and if we will read books more, we will maximize our strengths and minimize our weaknesses by learning.
Good afternoon, Hannah 21. Essay is very well, because of prospective thinking and interesting examples from your life. You should fix some minor mistakes:
Delete1)"really helps to us ... " --> "really helps us ";
2)"I want to example one thing." I did not understand that part of sentence. May be like that --> " I want to give an example.
3) As you writing advantages and disadvantages of television, you should to write advantages(you wrote) and disadvantages of reading, too.)
Excellent job! Keep writing, do your best :)
Hello Hannah21! Thanks for your post!
DeleteI agree with The Hero of Our World's three comments above.
In addition:
1) After "The book is the best teacher" it should read 'which is true' (not 'what is true")
2) When you said "advantages of watching TV such as:" you can remove the colon as this sentence does not require a colon.
I liked how you were able to describe the different ways that we can learn from both reading and TV :)
With the development of television people forget about books that really advance their imagination and language skills. Television plays an important role in our life. Every day we turn on the TV and watch news or films. To eat and watch simultaneously is comfortable and it becomes a part of our routine. For someone television is his or her work. There are so many reporters, operators and speakers who work very hard to provide as more new information as they can. However, if we overdo watching TV, it will bad affect us. Therefore, we cannot stop reading.
ReplyDeleteI totally agree with the statement that reading for pleasure evolves the fancy and language skills than watching TV does. Firstly, we see figures in our mind during reading. Concerning television it shows you ready pictures, your phantasy and creativity do not become better. Secondly, while reading we memorize sentence structures and replenish our vocabulary. On the other hand, when you watch videos you hear the audio and do not remember all information.
In my own experience, reading is the most useful way if you want to refine. I watched American films but it was hard for me to learn new words. Of course, I carry on do that for my listening and speaking. However, I noticed a real progress when I started to read National geographic books in grade seven. These little books contain a lot of academic words. Furthermore, the majority of the stories are fascinating. There are levels so that you can improve your skills step by step.
In conclusion I want to say that everybody has the freedom to choose but I advise you to read instead of watching TV.
Hello Margo! Thanks for your essay!
Delete1) "For someone" television is his or her work should be "for some people".
2) "as more" should be "as much" new information as they can.
3) You've claimed that watching too much TV will have a bad effect on us. Can you elaborate further what this "bad effect" could be? Convince your reader!
4) "phantasy" is spelt "fantasy"
5) Great vocabulary in your use of "replenish"!! Good work!
Thank you for your essay :)
People always think that it is better to watch television than read a book. However, watching TV is decreasing our critical thinking and imagination because the television always shows us opinions of other people. By listening other people our critical thinking will never start to develop. So I recommend you to read books. There are many pluses here!
ReplyDeleteBy reading we can improve our creativity and thinking because while reading we picture the location, people and their feelings. Moreover, we start living inside of the book and experiencing whatever the characters of the book feel.
Honestly, when I started to read national geographic books, I thought that it will never help me. However, national geographic books really affected to me and I understood that it is very helpful to improve language skills by reading.
Firstly, books can increase your vocabulary. It really helps you, when you need to say something in different word, but keep the meaning of that word too.
Secondly, reading books improve your grammar. After reading some books you will start pay attention to sentence structure, grammatical mistakes and other small, but important things. Furthermore, by learning something new, we can minimize our weaknesses.
I think, that you will agree with my opinion that we have more advantages in reading books than in watching TV.
Hello, "Young Jake"! I am posting this comment because I found your ideas new and interesting. You have presented your personal experience and used good vocabulary, so your essay is of good quality! Thank you for your hard work!
DeleteSome mistakes I found:
1 paragraph, 2 sentence. Add something after the verb - "watching TV is decreasing our critical thinking skills"
1 paragraph, 3 sentence. "By listening to other people"
2 paragraph, 1 sentence. Point out where we picture things and add smth to the word "thinking", do not use verb as a noun - "By reading we can improve our creativity and thinking skills because while reading we picture the location, people and their feelings in our minds. "
3 paragraph, 2 sentence. Do not use "to" after the verb "affect" - "Really affected me"
4 paragraph, 2 sentence. "when we need to say something in different words" or "when we need to paraphras" + "while keeping the meaning of our words".
Nowadays, in the 21 century, in the epoch of new information technologies and robotics, Internet and television are playing important role in our life. Today’s life cannot be imagined without smartphones and gadgets. Consequently, every human spend much more than 2-3 hours per day by surfing in the Internet, watching TV channels and browsing news in social networks. Because of this, television gradually replaces books, and it turns to a global problem.
ReplyDeleteTelevision badly affects on people. In recent years, by watching films, advertisements and movies human society developed in oneself “clip thinking”. It means that people’ memory stores information as a short video. The concentration and level of learning become low. Watching TV gives us a lot of information, but sometimes not needful.
It’s been proved that reading for pleasure develops the imagination and language skills. When you read books, you receive a lot of interesting and needful information. I would like to say that I started reading since 5-6 years. I very like books about adventures and sci-fi. It really develops my imagination and grammar skills.
I completely agree with the statement belong, because as a result people changed thinking and became addicted of new gadgets and television.
-Do not use one word a lot of times (needful)
Delete-I very like adventure and sci-fi books
Good job!
Hello, The Hero of Our World. Thank you for publishing version 2.
Delete1." day by surfing in the Internet" - you cannot say "surfing in the Internet", "surf the internet" will be correct. Check the meaning, please.
For example : "Do you surf the internet a lot?".
2. " Consequently, every human spend much more than 2-3 hours" - you said in general, however, it is your opinion and it is not a fact. Not all people or every human spending theit time like this. Add the expression "In my point of view" or "The majority of people prefer to - - - ".
3."... television are playing important role in our life" - people may disagree with you, so change it like " ... television are playing important role in people's life" or write about affects.
4. "Television badly affects on people." - it is your opinion(!). When you want to say something, remember to add "In my opinion" or "I am of the view that".
5. Unfortunatelly, I cannot see a comparison. Give more arguments and examples.
Thank you.
Hi, dear The Hero of Our World! I am writing this comment to share my point about your essay. Your work has several benefits such us a good introduction part, negative effects of watching TV and amazing ideas about clip thinking. Moreover, now thanks to you I am aware of knowledge that a phrase "clip thinking" means that people’ memory stores information as a short video. In addition, thank you very much for your hard work!
DeleteConsequently, I have some advice for you:
1) the 1st sentence - 1st paragraph.
* Must be "The Internet and a television", because the internet is one in the world as well as the Sun and the Moon. Furthemore, a word "tellevision" needs an article "a".
* It is better to write this sentence in Present Simple. It will be like "the Internet and a television play an important role in our liVES". I consider, you can not write it in the Present Continuous. Due to a rule "Present Continuous is used for action happening at the moment" and "Present Simple is used for habits, rutines and facts" . Here the usage of the internet and television is as our routine and habit. So it is better to use the Present Simple.
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Imagination and language skills are mainly developed by reading books and watching the television. However, television is more popular than books in that aspect. People like television because of its functionality and variety of information, which it could provide, but is it really a better version of books?
ReplyDeleteTelevision is more modern than books. It has many functions, which books do not have. It shows us visualized information and provides new ideas audibly, there is a variety of channels and just by switching them you could find information almost for all spheres in life. People choose it because reading books is a more troublesome way to find information.
Although, the quantity of books is enormous, finding an appropriate one is difficult. Using remote controller is much easier. To read books we need to have patience: we need to find a quiet and peaceful environment, so that others could not disturb us, we need to be in a place with good lighting, so that our eyes will not become tired, we need to immerse ourselves in books, so that we do not miss its content. On the other side, to watch TV we only need to buy one, install it inside a house, put batteries into a remote controller and then enjoy watching TV programs.
Nevertheless, all the “trouble” we go through while pleasure reading is a valuable experience. This “trouble” is what makes pleasure reading so attractive. Only through enduring hardships could we gain something truly precious. That is one of the main reasons reading is considered more beneficial than television.
Earlier I loved watching TV very much. There I could find plenty of information, which interested me. I liked watching cartoons and movies, found programs with information related to my past hobbies and learned from them. However, I also read books at the same time. I spent my days watching TV, but when interesting books “arrived” I read them with pleasure for days and weeks without stop.
Evidently books always interested me more than TV. “Why is that?” – you may ask. The answer is not too obvious, however. When I watch TV I feel myself an outsider, I could not immerse myself with the world shown there. Trying to forcefully do so only made me feel worse. So, with the flow of time TV programs became dull for me and I completely stopped watching them.
On the other hand, reading books never became boring and even now books and stories interest me the most. My English vocabulary as well as my ideas and thought process progressed while the quantity of books I read increased. From my POV, books and stories promote people’s minds and influence their thinking in a better way than television.
Hello again, BrokenSapphire. It is a pleasure to get to read another one of your essays. I continue to see improvement in your writing skills, so keep up the good work.
DeleteIntro: Not a bad introduction, but make sure you are addressing the topic of the essay directly. The essay prompt states that "It has been proven that reading for pleasure develops the imagination better than TV." It is asking if you agree or disagree. Your first sentence, introduction and the whole first part of the essay puts reading and TV watching on the same level. Therefore, your essay is NOT addressing the topic. Be careful of this as it will hurt your "task achievement" scores.
Para. 1: You don't need a "the" before "television", and there should be no comma between "information" and "which". Beware of using rhetorical questions in essays. This is informal and should not appear in a formal essay.
Para. 2: Again, watch the commas in your complex sentences. Remember that if the independent clause is first, there should be no comma before the subordinating conjunction (no comma between "functions" and "which"). Also, there should be either a full stop or conjunction (FANBOYS) between "audibly" and "there".
Para. 3: There should be no comma after "Although", and the list after the statement: "To read books we need to have patience:" should probably be three compound sentences and not one long list. This sentence is confusing because of it's length.
Para. 5: A comma should be after "Earlier" in the first sentence, and "there" in the 2nd sentence is not needed. There should be a comma in between "arrived" and "I" in the last sentence.
Para. 6: There should be a comma after "Evidently", and again, be careful with rhetorical questions. There should be a comma after the statement "when I watch TV", and a full stop after "outsider". There should be a comma after "with the flow of time", and one between "me" and "and" (FANBOYS).
Para. 7: There should be a comma between "boring" and "and". Don't use acronyms like "POV" in an essay; spell the words out.
Conclusion: You should not wait until the end of the essay to make your opposing points. The concluding paragraph should have been a body paragraph.
Overall: You have written a good essay, but beware of small grammar mistakes (mainly the use of commas). Make sure you address the topic directly, and try not to use rhetorical questions in a formal essay.
“When I was your age, television was called books” say writer William Goldman, because now television has replaced books. Teenagers all the free time sitting in the internet and maximum read magazines about fashion or cosmetic. But it’s bad or not?
ReplyDeleteBooks educate us. For example, reading develops our grammar and punctuation. We maximize our vocabulary by reading books. For example, I read books in Russian language as the result I know how to use punctuation marks while I write.
Books train our imagination. We receive only ready information by watching television as a result our imagination does not evolve. Conversely when we read books we start imagining. For example, in my childhood my mother used to read fairy tales to me before I went to bed.
Books help to learn new languages and cognize new culture of other nationals. I am aware of opportunities developing knowledge of other ethnic groups for our generation. For example, it’s help to me with English languages. I read “national geographic”, it is interesting books about all. You can found information about new technology, another interesting place and my favorite about other types of animals.
It is evident that knowledge is power. Without it we might not be able to mitigate threats around us. Reading books gives us knowledge that we can use in this life. For example, books about psychology help me with public speaking.
Good afternoon, Marshal Lee! I like your essay, because of big amount of academic words and examples from your life. However, there some mistakes that should be fixen:
Delete1) "You can found ..." --> "You can find ...";
2) "Teenagers all the free time sitting ..." --> " Teenagers all the free time sit in the Internet ...";
3) You said about teenagers, which sit in the Internet. Moreover, you asked a question "But it’s bad or not?". Then you say about advantages of books. Why??? There no logic conception. You should say about disadvantages of television, and then smoothly shift to the books.
4)In conclusion we should not add instances. It should have been added in main part of the text.
5)"by watching television as a result our imagination does not evolve." before "as a result" we should put "and".
6)"say writer" --> "said writer";
In main, your essay is well. and I liked it! Keep working and do your best :)
>Paragraph 3, 3rd sentence, we always put comma after words like "Conversely", "However", "Furthermore" etc. because there are transition words.
Delete>When you want to say about something in plural form, do not use "is". For example: "it is interesting books"-->"there are interesting books"
>We never start our questions like this "But it's bad or not?", structure of the question is "am/is/are+subject+body"
>pafragraph 4, sentence 3 "English language*"
>pafragraph 4, sentence 4 "I am read "national geographic", it is interesting books about something(add your information here)"
>pafragraph 4, sentence 5 "You can find* information on* new technology, interesting place and my favorite about different* types of animals."
In our 21st century new technologies are developing very fast. Moreover, television was invented last century. In spite of the fact that most people prefer spending their leisure time watching TV, books are still with us. Moreover, writers did not disappear, yet, so people stop reading.
ReplyDeleteFirstly, I want to say about our imagination. When we read even though we do not see anything we start picturing characters and events in our mind. Person chooses clothing, eyes, generally everything s/he wants. It will be like we are living on another planet, when person reading it is like he is with his dreams. On the other hand when we watch television I am of the view that we do not think, but only look at a blue screen. Maybe we will not like externality of person. For example: we may response main character as 20 -25 years old handsome man, with lush hairs and perfect snow-white smile, but at film it completely different.
Let’s talk about language skills. When we are watching television, we don’t think about anything besides film. Admit honestly, do you think how spelling this word or using this or that grammatical rule wrong, while watching film? However, when person is reading book, he subconsciously learning some grammatical.
For example: Our class, we are reading “National Geographic” from 7th grade. In my mind we write much better than before. From these books I learn words, collocations, such as: mournful thought, gentle sorrow, misfortune, meanwhile and many other words. Moreover, I think that my and my classmates’ grammar was improved a lot. Firstly, when I start read books I did not understand some information. Always browse some word and collocations. However, right now it is easier for me to read books, I am able to understand and learn new information.
I can say that reading books much better than watching TV. Furthermore, reading develops imagination and language skills than television.
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it completely different -> it is completely different
Deletehe subconsciously learning some grammatical -> he is subconsciously learning new grammar rules.(it is better to say "learnes")
reading books much better than watching TV -> reading books is much better than watching TV
Please do not repeat the words, try to use the synonyms. Do not forget to put a coma after linking words.
In our leisure time we like to do what we want. We enjoy it and delight. However, we need to start thinking about its help for our development.
ReplyDeleteI partially agree that reading for pleasure advances our imagination and improves language proficiency more than watching TV.
When we are reading a book, we are aware of opportunity to better English language skills, because we can learn new words for us, and find a material about anything, develop ourselves with necessary information. Furthermore, people visualize characters, actions that happening in the plot, which can effect to the development of imagination. Thirdly, while reading we pay more attention for words than we watch the TV. Sometimes in the book we can notice definitions of words. Also book describes happening actions more detailed. Try to maximize your strengths, so you can affect yourself and height language skills. It mitigates threats, such as illiteracy and inadvertence.
Nevertheless, watching TV can influence to us from the good sides, too. It develops our imagination. For example, cartoons illustrate pictures in colors and make the character’s voices, give full information of the occasion. Films can show some historic or vital situations that were in people’s life, so that we will be able to understand and conceive its significance. TV programs give us information from all over the world, about the last news.
Consequently, both reading for pleasure and watching TV impacts to our development at all if we use and take its maximum benefits. If you minimize your weaknesses like laziness, and start to read books you can build your successful future.
Hey, "BlackPink". I liked reading your essay. Moreover I found from it a lot of new phrases, expressions and words for me (inadvertence, illiteracy). Thank you for it! However you have some mistakes such as:
Delete• "we need to start thinking about its help for our development." I thin you should put comma after "about" or rewrite like this: "we need to start thinking about it will help for our development."
• "Thirdly, while reading we pay more attention for words than" → "Thirdly, while reading we pay more attention to words than"
I think it is all your mistakes . Good job♥
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actions that happening in the plot -> actions that are happening
DeleteThirdly, while reading we pay more attention for words than we watch the TV. -> Thirdly, compared with watcing TV while reading we pay more attention for words.
Sometimes in the book we can notice definitions of words. Also book describes happening actions more detailed. (It seems to me that in these sentenсe you need to write "books" because you talk in general)
Moreover, I think it will be better if you write about your own experience. Good luck!
Some people consider watching TV, reading books or doing other stuff as their favorite activity. Moreover, we need to understand that reading for pleasure improves our imagination, makes us a little bit smarter, teaches us some expressions and ideas, betters our language skills as well as affects our knowledge and understanding about the world.
ReplyDeleteStarting from second part of 7th grade my classmates and I began reading books of “National Geographic" series. All of us found them boring, not interesting. We thought that reading them would not help. However, it should be accepted that our skills have been increasing by reading these books. Although some books were interesting, helpful and full of information about our world. In one book you will read about long journeys to find part of ancient kings of the Earth, dinosaurs, or in another book you will find out about bright colorful hummingbirds which live on tropical islands, you can meet stories about eastern countries, water pollution, in daggered whales and many more. Here you find out slangs in English, new expressions or other meanings of well-known word, and all of them made us more skillful. You can surf the internet to search thousand examples from lives of hundred famous people.
Thus I agree with this statement, but not completely because TV shows can affect you as books, too. Watching shows or other actions are going to help you if they are done for pleasure. For example, I start to study English language thanks to computer games. When I saw words on unknown English for me, I started to compare them with Russian, so I find out new words. However, they were simple like menu, kick, man, tree, and others. These examples are counting for hundreds, starting from TV until gaming.
In conclusion, I am willing to share the view that every activity that done for pleasure, especially reading will improve your skills and influence positively on your life and imagination. So let us doing it because knows language is way to communicate with other people as well as to express yourself, and let’s do it correctly.